YOur profile comes across as fun and you have a good sense of yourselves. If I suggest any changes it would be to capitalize at the beginning of sentences, and watch overusing excaimation points...use them sparingly for emphasis, not on every statement. Careful with a few spellings (slutty, you're instead of your in places, those types of things).

All in all, I wouldn't really change anything, and the little typos and stuff aren't bad enough to warrant change either, if you don't want to!

I think you sound fun, appealing, and should have a lot of success.
Gina