Also, every sentence should start with a capital letter and end with a period. Pretty basic stuff like that would help many profiles on here, not just yours.

Lol @Table.

Railroad guy, clear writing only comes from clear thinking. Nothing magical about it. Just take some time and effort to think through the profile sections and what you want to convey in each one of them. Then write simple, clear sentences to do that.

No offense, but if I were you I would throw out what you've got and start over. Only you can describe yourself and what you're looking for, and if you don't put the time and effort into that, many people viewing your profile will assume that you don't put much thought into other things as well.

Unless you are looking for a divorced male, you might want to rewrite the first section for starters :)

I would like someone to review my profile and see where it needs help. I didn't take creative writing in school and need some help. Thanks in advance