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TOPIC: our simple selfs

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User Details are only visible to members.	If I was browsing profiles I would probably not respond to it. This is not to say you are not wonderful people-- I haven't met you. I can only go by what I read. It feels too wordy. Seems like a lot of what you're wanting to say can be said much quicker. For starters, you mention in two places about solo play. Chop one out. You mention you are not drinkers. You probably don't have to go into not being recovering alcoholics and the other two or three sentences there. "While we don't mind if you do, we do not care to drink" says it all quickly and keeps things light. I feel a twinge of negativity. We don't do this, we won't do that, don't do this to us, don't try that. When I look at a profile and see a bunch of negative statements, it turns me off. If you feel you need to point out things you don't like or want (and we all have to at some point), again, make it quick and light and move on. The bit about "we've had literally thousands of emails" should go. I get what you're trying to say, but to me it comes off a bit arrogant/snobbish. Now I feel like I'm just one of thousands of people trying to meet you and my odds are probably not that good. It's part of the overall negative mojo I feel when reading your profile. My suggestion is to replace some negatives with some positives. Shorten your profile by saying the same things with less words. Maybe show some more humor to make it more inviting. As for your contact email... it also seems too long. You probably don't have to say that your profile "puts it all out there"... once they've read your profile they can see it's all out there. As for the romance part, that's probably a bit much to put into a first contact (and again, adds to a negative air). I have friends here who address the romance part very quickly in their profile. "We are not looking for romance and don't wish to date a couple. If this is your wish, we are probably not the couple for you." As much as we ask for a response positive or negative, some couples just won't answer your email. We just leave notes on their profile so that if we come across them again we know our contact history with them. Hope at least some of this helps. Best of luck.
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