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TOPIC: Would really appreciate a profile critique
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Hi
If anyone has any ideas on how to improve our profile it would be very much appreciated. A lot of people have looked at our profile (573) but very few responses (4). I know I'm not a very good salesman but it seems like if it was better worded or maybe better pictures there would be a better response rate. Or maybe it's just that we are not that desirable. Thanks in advance for all your help and advice. |
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Welcome Marie60!
Not sure if you have shortened your profile since your OP, but I don't think it's too long now. I'm not sure what kind of people you are seeking tho... I have a question tho about this sentence... "She looks great in 6" heels and very short dresses or shorts ...due the fact she works out 4-5 times a week with a trainer" I'm not sure why you need to say that last part ....and it left me wondering if you are seeking people who also do the same but haven't said so. Does that matter to you? If it does, say it. If it doesn't I'd just leave out the last part. ...just my opinion :) Good luck and stay patient! |
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Thanks hotsummernight
I corrected the spelling error and took out one sentence so far. I definitely need to think about the message I want to send, |
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"Consider every magazine ad you've ever seen for length. Your profile is an ad. Treat it as such and shorten it."
Not quite how we'd see it. Think of your tagline and default picture as the magazine ad, design it to catch the attention of others, with the goal of drawing them in to look at your profile. Your profile is the one-page informational brochure, giving others enough information about you and what you're looking for, so they can determine compatibility. With that in mind, I would not recommend shortening it as much as giving it a good rewrite. (We'll give your profile a good review and post feedback shortly) Mr TF3 |
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Hi
If anyone has any ideas on how to improve our profile it would be very much appreciated. A lot of people have looked at our profile (573) but very few responses (4). I know I'm not a very good salesman but it seems like if it was better worded or maybe better pictures there would be a better response rate. Or maybe it's just that we are not that desirable. Thanks in advance for all your help and advice. |
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TOPIC: Would really appreciate a profile critique
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