Thanks, all;

We'll probably take some pictures of the Male-half this weekend!

-SJBluebirds

At the risk of repeating what some people have said, you need more than just boobs, and you need a pic of him. When people see no pics they wonder what you're hiding.

Also, maybe it's just paranoia, but your description leads me to believe you are mostly new to the lifestyle, but the profile is more than 6 years old. I'm not saying you might not have a good reason for that, but if I see that, I wonder what's been going on.....

I'll toss my $.02 in here, Its early and I just had my coffee :) As it sits right now I felt the profile was good but wordy. I have found in other communications that most people only read the first paragraph of a communication and only read on if they are interested in what was said up front. Especially if the communication looks like a long read. I know thats tough in a profile where you are trying to advertise and screen at the same time. Instead of naming coffee shops I'd probably just say "a coffee shop" just to get the length down and still get the point across. There are a couple of instances of that and removing the "or something" statements that might cut the length and still say what you need to say. On the pictures note. I love breasts. I really do. But I also need to see something more about you. Build, body language, something to put those radiant ta-tas into perspective. Hunting as a couple means my wife needs to be interested also. I suggest more than a few pics of your man. When we make first contact we often ask up front for more pictures to put you two into perspective. What would you look like at dinner? I am understanding of the no public face shots, but I do need to see them in private after we make initial contact. I love looking through profiles that have piles of g to r rated pictures. I suggest load it up. That is what does it for us. Happy hunting. Now that I've critiqued a profile, I'm going to re-read mine and ask for the same criticism ;)

We don't do public face pics-they are in the private gallery. However, I would recommend adding some sort of pic of him to the public gallery.

I understand that, but for me/us to make first contact, I like to know what they look like.

If I don't know what they look like, why would I contact them?

Not sure about others, but we don't contact profiles that don't have public face pics of both male and female.

Thank you sacpitblueboy and reallyred (blue and red together -- what a coincidence!) for the feedback; we've incorporated your suggestions, and hope it sounds a bit better, now.

More suggestions, anyone?

-SJBluebirds

Just reread it, and it's much better! Good luck!

Gina

ditto...talking about kids, unless it's to say you have some, is not a good way to initiate contact.

That said, I have to politely disagree about swingers and "friends" mingling w/ kids. We have a group of swing friends and we all go to amusement parks (we're probably on of the only couples W/O kids at home!) and will be having BBQs that are family friendly. We know how to behave ourselves and nothing swing-oriented will, pardon, come up.

Back to the profile helps now...

G.