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TOPIC: Too much, too little
Created by: 22getlaid2nite
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Critique?

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Wow! A few simple changes makes almost all the difference. Much better.

Actually, now that you've broken out the 'not' list from everything, it reads much less negative than before. (Bonus feedback, you might consider rewriting the first section to include those 'not' items rather than having a list in your description section.)

Get those other pictures posted and I'd say you've got it :)

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Thanks to both(all) of you so far! Can you please point out some of the 'limit's we imposed? Also, we broke it up a bit so it is not so... 'blocked'.

Mansfield OH
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First impressions:

Your paragraphs are too long. Not too much info, just too long. Hard to read with your thoughts all clumped together. Rewrite them into a couple shorter paragraphs within each section to give readers a visual break.

If she is bi-curious, say so in your stats, and detail her interest limits in the profile body. Be upfront rather than hiding it in the fine print.

When we came to the end, we read "We will respond to any emails and most likely any requests." By that point, we have the impression you won't be interested in any requests with all the limits listed :( Try to tip your profile balance more into the positive during rewrite :)

Additional photos, preferably some PG shots of both you and he. Showing multiple pics of only breasts/cleavage is highly overdone on these sites.

Mr TF3

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Rare for me to say this, but I actually liked this profile a lot!

Some will say it's too negative, but I belong to the school of saying what you want and don't want and getting less mail. Others would prefer more mail and then having to reject lots of people they don't want to meet.

If you've read the forums, you'll also see lots of comments about whether experienced couples should meet with newbie couples, and what it means if you aren't willing to play on the first date. You should at least be familiar with those discussions.

If there was anything I would suggest improving, it would be your pics. First, since the woman in a couple often has the final say in whether to meet you or not, you should have a pic of your male. Second, if you're only going to have two pics, I wouldn't do body parts closeups. I'd rather see full body shots, clothed or unclothed, with your faces averted if you want to protect your privacy.

Kitty Hawk NC
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Critique?

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