Recently updated profile check it out please: Swingers Discussion 181722

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Recently updated profile check it out please: Swingers Discussion 181722

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TOPIC: Recently updated profile check it out please

Created by: slutsrusnaz Original Starting post for this thread:
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User Details are only visible to members.	Looking at your second section, break it up for smoother reading, and add in the (slightly edited) paragraph from section one. Also, notice the lack of info on him...try to expand and expound, unless his only job is sitting on the sidelines holding the camera. *Start Example* She is a unique mix of Ukrainian and Asian, 5'2" (5'8" with her usual choice of 6" f-me heels on!), pierced B-cups, shaved, and a multiple squirter and bi with the right girl, with the most luscious bubble butt ever! It is not necessary that the female half of the couple be bi, just an added bonus. He is athletic build, has clean shaved body, pierced nipples, cut with nice package. We are VERY real. Not pic collectors or online chatters. We are here to meet, hang out, make friends, and have some great fun along the way! We don't have hard and fast rules, (except for always playing safe,) but we have learned what works the best for us. Lately we have been throwing house parties and love it! *End Example*
Saint Paul MN			Username hidden (465 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	The first section is clunky, not a smooth read. Your information isn't the problem, just the presentation. Move your first paragraph to the second section, where it belongs, and paginate the rest with smooth flow in mind, like this: *Start example* Couples: We prefer experienced full swap couples. We are open to pretty much anyone as long as you are open minded and take care of yourself. Single guys: We like MFM. She likes above average guys (you know who you are), and prefer under 40 (unless you ARE one of those guys who doesn't look his age). Single girls: We like all shape and sizes. We are great if you have never done it before as we are experienced, laid back and respect all your boundaries. *End Example* I've added the missing word "are" to your single guys detail, used CAPS to flag it for you. Consider rewording your single girls detail. First, try "gals" or "women" instead of "girls", given girls usually implies prepubescent females... And the "We are great if you have never done it before as we are experienced..." portion can give the impression you are only good when you play with new females, avoiding other experienced members that would know better about how good you really are...I doubt that is the message you want to deliver :) Now to look closely at your other sections...
Saint Paul MN			Username hidden (465 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	Thanks all! With 100 degrees here San Diego sounds great lol.
Scottsdale AZ			Username hidden (12 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	Or Dallas? spacibo (damn forum wont accept cyrillic characters) -M
Fort Worth TX			Username hidden (1434 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	It's short, sweet and to the point. The only reason not to like it is if the reader doesn't fit into your criteria. So.....when are you guys heading to San Diego? lol
Danville PA			Username hidden (1804 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	I like it! To the point and gives enough information about both of you to weed out the non-profile readers out there.
Virginia Beach VA			Username hidden (16 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	Thanks!
Scottsdale AZ			Username hidden (12 post)

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TOPIC: Recently updated profile check it out please