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TOPIC: Is profile (sexual manifesto) too boring or too long

Created by: denovo2000 Original Starting post for this thread:
We have tried to be very clear in who we are, what we do, and what we want (while being vulnerable as well). We have had several people say that they like the profile with one person even lovingly calling it a "sexual manifesto" (which I guess it kind of is). But with over 5,000 hits and not as many inquiries, does the length or content drive people away or intrigue them? Please let us know your opinion.

Created by: denovo2000
Original Starting post for this thread:

We have tried to be very clear in who we are, what we do, and what we want (while being vulnerable as well). We have had several people say that they like the profile with one person even lovingly calling it a "sexual manifesto" (which I guess it kind of is). But with over 5,000 hits and not as many inquiries, does the length or content drive people away or intrigue them? Please let us know your opinion.

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User Details are only visible to members.	SLS 101: The dudes screen the profiles and the dudettes make the decisions. Based on your pics, I'm guessing you're getting a ton of hits (from dudes). Women are not expected to take one for the team and the fact that you have no pics of him will seriously impact your responses. The profile is secondary to pics. If we like your pics, we will scan your profile to see if we're somewhat compatable. We won't even look at you if there are no pics of the guy.
Virginia Beach VA			Username hidden (270 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	And however you decide to rewrite, please, Please, PLEASE keep in the words pejorative and proclivities! Hot! Hot! Hot! --------------------------- I admit, I had to look up 'pejorative', damn that is a great word! Devo: You profile is very inviting to a SM. Mr needs to get a bit more of his attitude and personality going. Like comments below - the third person voice is confusing. "They like this or that" Hard to follow. The He/She seems to work (as in many profiles) but switch up the "They" for "We". IMHO Overall Dick, I'd give it a 9 for danceability and I'd call it "bird-worthy"!
Amherst OH			Username hidden (2271 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	We adored the literary references in your profile! A few minor things... If you intend on playing as a couple a photo of the male half in your public photos is essential. I personally find genital shots repulsive unless requested but a G rated body shot is important. If you have no intention of playing as a couple then a single F profile may be better suited. While I respect the "it's all about her desires" as the Bi half of a couple I want to hear just as much about the male half. Tell us about yourself! Even if your fantasies are all about making hers come true how do you figure into the equation? And however you decide to rewrite, please, Please, PLEASE keep in the words pejorative and proclivities! Hot! Hot! Hot! We have listed our profile for critique as well and would love to get your insight. Best of luck in all your endeavors!
Clinton Township MI			Username hidden (23 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	To KandysWill: Thank you so much for taking the time to review the profile and provide your incisive comments. We will play with rewriting it in the first person voice. Also, I think you are probably right about too much detail. Its better to build mystery. As for humor, I will do my best. There have been many iterations of the profile and the first few versions had some nice humor, but I think it got buried after awhile with all of the other stuff. Perhaps what we need to do is shorten the profile to bring back the fun. I think it was Winston Churchill who once apologized to a pen pal for writing such a long letter because he did not have time to write a short one. :) Also, I think your comment about discouraging the "unwashed masses" denotes an unexpected benefit that we had not considered but, at the same time, I don't want people to feel like they are going to be admonished in any way. Again, thanks so much for taking the time to review the profile. It is very much appreciated.
Charleston WV			Username hidden (3 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	Hi Guys, A+ for grammar. A for punctuation. B+ for accreditation regarding reference source material. Overall Grade "A" A few comments from these unworthy reviewers. Kandy and I feel that the couple you studied for this research project sound very interesting and worth meeting. LOL Ist personal singular sounds far more inviting that third person narratives. By the way. Too much revealed. Where is the mystery? Any humor to be had? Where is the fun? If we were to send you a "Check us out" request then honestly it would be as if we were expecting our professor at one point to admonish us so we would be reluctant to even try. One good point is that anyone that reads your posting might be inspired enough to see the Davinci Code a few times to get the codex right. However, you will keep the unwashed masses away and that in and of itself might have been well worth the effort.
North Kingstown RI			Username hidden (18 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	We have tried to be very clear in who we are, what we do, and what we want (while being vulnerable as well). We have had several people say that they like the profile with one person even lovingly calling it a "sexual manifesto" (which I guess it kind of is). But with over 5,000 hits and not as many inquiries, does the length or content drive people away or intrigue them? Please let us know your opinion.
Charleston WV			Username hidden (3 post)

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