Id welcome a once over: Swingers Discussion 213818

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Id welcome a once over: Swingers Discussion 213818

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TOPIC: I'd welcome a once over

Created by: Mike_Eliza_NNJ Original Starting post for this thread:
Hello, If anyone is bored ... feel free to have a go ... I'll just go put on my bullet proof vest while you read, lol Please comment advice & suggestions but if you're going to get 'personal' with praise or criticisms, than it would be appreciated if you do so via my inbox. TYSVVM xoxo !E

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User Details are only visible to members.	Succinct, to the point and clearly stated. Pics are good and the back to back is very good but smiles would be better even if in profile. Hopefully your profile will weed out the food groups that could be a waste of time. Best K & W
North Kingstown RI			Username hidden (18 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	@Livewirecpl: I took MOST of your advice. I replaced most of the ampersands with the word “and” throughout the profile. Then I removed the “…'s” and either added commas or periods making complete sentences. Your comment about noticing many instances of improper capitalization, (where a word was capitalized incorrectly in the middle of a sentence) - I was only able to find about 3, guess I'm not a good 'proof reader'. Changing "We are not into interracial relationships" to "we’re only interested in same race couples", to me could be misconstrued; We do not choose to play with anyone who is not the same race as us and so making your change could be implied that so long as 'both' of the other people in the other couple are the same race play would be ok. No? my hard limits are my hard limits. what's not understood by the word Braniac? or Goofy? if the category fits people will know it as I'm sure somewhere in their lifetime they would have been told it by their peers. should be objective? what makes UNCIRCUMCISED PENIS', any more/or less objective in a hard limit than baggy clothes? I appreciated your 'thorough' two cents, and thank you for your time. Your comments and corrective actions were much appreciated. Warm Regards, !E
Sussex NJ			Username hidden (19 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	This is my opinion, but in general, your profile needs some grammatical work. Start by replacing the ampersands with the word “and” throughout the profile. Then remove the “…” and either add commas or periods to make complete sentences. I noticed many instances of improper capitalization, where a word was capitalized incorrectly in the middle of a sentence. I know this seems trivial but a grammatically correct profile shows that you put forth time and effort into generating it. Now to the specifics, 3rd line – remove the “....” before “for a friendship in and out of the bedroom” and it the sentence there. Remove the “....” before “the friends with benefits kind ;)” and move that portion of the sentence to the end of the 4th Line. Begin the 4th line with “Ideally looking for” so it reads, “Ideally looking for a steady couple with whom we can enjoy both the "vanilla" life and the sexy, fun adult life; the friends with benefits kind ;-)” Change "We are not into interracial relationships" to "we’re only interested in same race couples". Remove “select” from before single males. You are already being selective by considering them on “a case by case basis” Add the word “us” after “When contacting..” Shootin should be shooting The section that starts “***We do not play on a first date unless the chemistry is right…” is very confusing. You will not communicate whether the chemistry is right to your prospective partners because you’re too shy but the chemistry has to be right to play? You’re suggesting that your partners be mind readers? Try rewriting this section one sentence (one thought) at a time. Then put them together to project your thought. This one is just personal opinion but some of your hard limits are not limits at all but personality preferences which should probably go in the Looking For section. Hard Limits should be easily understood by all, and they should be objective. I, as a reader, understand that you do not want “UNCIRCUMCISED PENIS', FACIAL HAIR, PUBIC HAIR, Smoking, Scat, Knife Play, Humiliation, Derogation, Servitude, Golden Showers, Baby talk,!” However some of your limits such as “Brainiacs, Fakes, Wanna-be know-it-alls, Goofiness, Sarcasm, Sweat, Baggy clothes, & Liars” are very subjective and really up to personal interpretation. Just my two cents. Best of luck,
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User Details are only visible to members.	Hello, If anyone is bored ... feel free to have a go ... I'll just go put on my bullet proof vest while you read, lol Please comment advice & suggestions but if you're going to get 'personal' with praise or criticisms, than it would be appreciated if you do so via my inbox. TYSVVM xoxo !E
Sussex NJ			Username hidden (19 post)

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TOPIC: I'd welcome a once over