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TOPIC: Honest_Feedback_about_my_profile_would_be_greatly_appreciated
Created by: joeodd2
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Please let me know what y'all think about my profile. I'm always open to suggestions.

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Joeodd2-

In addition to Kat's observations, I noticed the following typos:

First section- -"...glass half full kind of __out look__." Outlook is a single word. -"I like to keep things __lite__ and see where the flow takes us..." Light, because we're not talking about beer. Also, as you've written it, this sentence should close with a full-stop period, not an ellipsis leading into the next sentence. -"And one more thing." Here you'll want to use a comma to lead into the next sentence accordingly: "And one more thing, please be a good conversationalist." Notice I removed the talker portion, I get the impression you want an actual conversation rather than gibberish. -"I like meeting ladies who's objective is to..." Your context indicates the possessive whose should be used rather than the contraction who's.

Second section- -"...became a __Tall__ dorky kid." Tall should not be capitalized in your context. -You say 33 y/o in this section, but show 32 in your stats.

Third section- -"Me and my group had a very intimate Jacuzzi party when I lived in Louisiana." Me doesn't fit grammatically, use instead: "My group and I had a very intimate..."

Fourth section- "...don't get the wrong __Idea__." Idea should not be capitalized in your context.

Good profile otherwise, Mrs TF3

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I'm not one that can give a good critique on profiles, but I really enjoy your posts in the Fora.

Brooklyn Park MN
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Please let me know what y'all think about my profile. I'm always open to suggestions.

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TOPIC: Honest Feedback about my profile would be greatly appreciated
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