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TOPIC: Hi was hoping for a little cretique of my profile
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I have updated my profile and was hoping to get some feedback or suggestions on how to make it more appealing.
Thanks Chris |
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PS "Critique" not "Cretique"
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Read it out loud to yourself to find where natural breaks should occur, then use punctuation to make those breaks read better.
My pet peeve: the wrong use of the word "your" It should be "you're." Other than that, fine. G. |
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I have updated my profile and was hoping to get some feedback or suggestions on how to make it more appealing.
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TOPIC: Hi was hoping for a little cretique of my profile
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