Another profile review request: Swingers Discussion 216191

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TOPIC: Another profile review request

Created by: akerehs Original Starting post for this thread:
We've been tweaking and playing with our profile and would appreciate some feedback. Thanks in advance :)

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User Details are only visible to members.	Akerehs- Three things stuck out on my initial read. 1) The reader is immediately admonished for something they have not yet had a chance to do. 2) Excessive use of colored text throughout. 3) There is a huge red flag at the end of your profile. Suggestions: 1) Rewrite your profile to reflect you in a positive light, avoid using the negative. For the admonition example, your profile starts with an "answer us, we deserve it" opening, making you sound arrogant and entitled instead of open and welcoming. 2) Limit your use of colored text to adding emphasis to key items, typically less than a sentence each. Full paragraphs of colored text de-emphasizes not only the salient points, it also makes the entire profile a difficult read. 3) If you do nothing else to your profile, lose that bogus "legal warning." Read warning-related threads for further info -- in sum, it is unenforceable and screams of paranoia and/or drama. Hope this feedback helps. Good luck, Mrs TF3
Saint Paul MN			Username hidden (467 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	The pictures were amusing. I did smile at the first one or two. I can tell that you really value a good sense of humor. You will attract others who find a sense of humor very important. Yes, I must have cracked my funny bone. You seem very relaxed and down to earth. I'm sure that I am totally not your type, but if you wanted to attract someone with my sensibilities, rather than laying on a couch, I would love to see you in the great outdoors enjoying travel or a sport. I love to see a little style too. Beth Ditto is a BBW, among tons of others who seem to embrace their bodies. Of course, if you are happy with your profile and the responses that you are getting, rock on!
Lubbock TX			Username hidden (263 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	They actually are meant to be amusing as we both got a good laugh out of them, and the uncensored versions are private so we can share them as we want.
Rosedale MD			Username hidden (8 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	First, you pictures are a disaster. Sorry. Do you want to make us laugh or seduce us? The Groucho Marx editing rather creeped me out. Why have facial close-ups and then totally obscure the way you look? The only reason that I can think of is that you are not proud your bodies or what you are doing. Find another way to obscure the face. Peeking out from behind a hat so that we just see an eye or the mouth - much better. Find some flattering body shots. Any one that is going to play with you will see your body eventually anyway. You can find some sexy clothes and sexy poses. Work it! Finally, under what are you looking for. It sounded like you started off with a scolding. Um no. If you must scold, at least start out positive and bury the scolding somewhere. Better yet, leave it off. If someone does not honor you will a reply, I bet that they are not your type anyway.
Lubbock TX			Username hidden (263 post)

User Details are only visible to members.	We've been tweaking and playing with our profile and would appreciate some feedback. Thanks in advance :)
Rosedale MD			Username hidden (8 post)

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TOPIC: Another profile review request