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TOPIC: Another profile review request
Created by: akerehs
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We've been tweaking and playing with our profile and would appreciate some feedback. Thanks in advance :)
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Akerehs-

Three things stuck out on my initial read. 1) The reader is immediately admonished for something they have not yet had a chance to do. 2) Excessive use of colored text throughout. 3) There is a *huge* red flag at the end of your profile.

Suggestions: 1) Rewrite your profile to reflect you in a positive light, avoid using the negative. For the admonition example, your profile starts with an "answer us, we deserve it" opening, making you sound arrogant and entitled instead of open and welcoming.

2) Limit your use of colored text to adding emphasis to key items, typically less than a sentence each. Full paragraphs of colored text de-emphasizes not only the salient points, it also makes the entire profile a difficult read.

3) If you do nothing else to your profile, lose that bogus "legal warning." Read warning-related threads for further info -- in sum, it is unenforceable and screams of paranoia and/or drama.

Hope this feedback helps. Good luck, Mrs TF3

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They actually are meant to be amusing as we both got a good laugh out of them, and the uncensored versions are private so we can share them as we want.

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We've been tweaking and playing with our profile and would appreciate some feedback. Thanks in advance :)

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TOPIC: Another profile review request